Good catch
I’m giving feedback on an essay this morning. It’s the third draft, so mostly I’m looking for punctuation and technical errors and also checking how she’s implemented my previous suggestions. So I’m reading along and am suddenly stunned by the excellent conclusion sentence to her third paragraph. It’s a stellar sentence. I read it two and three times, admiring it’s construction and the way it brings her point home. I go to the previous draft to make sure the conclusion was something I had told her to amend. Yes, this was not the sentence that was there before and there’s a footnote number there. I go back to the current draft and put in a new footnote to praise her for this amazing sentence. Then I stop. I go back to the previous draft.
Oh. I wrote that sentence.
No wonder I liked it, I guess.
I had given her so many “this needs to be stronger,” “this doesn’t flow,” sort of feedback comments already that I thought an example of what I meant might be useful and I did tell her she could just use it if she wanted.
Good thing I checked, anyway. That would have been embarrassing.
But really, it IS a great sentence, so I have to share it:
Being created in the image of God, they value knowledge; yet there is a knowledge that would endanger them if they possessed it, for the acquisition of it would be disobedience.
Can you guess the subject of the paper? :)
